Yeah, I felt that jarring after I wrote it; that or Dahl came over as stalkerish Which Dahl is and he's dominating. Trying to put the best spin on it, I'm going to say that Dahl liked what he saw, Nate & Neal didn't know that David was going to do naked while outside, and David is going to be very pushy to get what he wants and drive Dahl crazy waiting to be released from being a responsible little brother-sitter.
Your last line about getting to know Dahl better.. *looks at you suspiciously* I'm trying to stomp on plot bunnies by hypothesizing what ifs from where the story left off so I won't feel an urgent need to write more of it. *grins* Thank you.
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Trying to put the best spin on it, I'm going to say that Dahl liked what he saw, Nate & Neal didn't know that David was going to do naked while outside, and David is going to be very pushy to get what he wants and drive Dahl crazy waiting to be released from being a responsible little brother-sitter.
Your last line about getting to know Dahl better.. *looks at you suspiciously* I'm trying to stomp on plot bunnies by hypothesizing what ifs from where the story left off so I won't feel an urgent need to write more of it. *grins* Thank you.